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From the beginning
I knew pain, neglect, distrust.
How weak, how penitent am I
that I bow my pride to you.

Please, will you offer relief
if I beg and flatter ‘til suns
fade and moons crumble to dust,
for me, this foolish pained man?

Inside I am sore, so sorry-
weary of living beside my hateful,
lonely shadow who dares not reckon
for me: unholy, empty, impure.

But you, my dear, fill me up
to the brim with cool, clear
summer-iced antidote;
please ease the ache of my dried insides.
*    *     *     *     *     *     *     *
For your pains, love, presented
with razor-sweet tongue-crippling smiles
Hard Candy for Bitter Wounds
to soothe you to the gallows.

Savor the metallic-laced taste
masked by succulent shine,
the tantalizing innocence of
young, freckled flesh.

Walk into the wolf-trap
and writhe no more,
but know that an audience watches
you come undone in shame.

No fortified diamond,
no silver plea can loosen the grip
of the noose
which you so willingly knelt for.

Don’t weep now, Bitter Man,
as the amber-encased razor
protrudes from dissolved
candy, cuts open tender flesh.

It was always what you begged for,
My Love, to end in such a way.
Your worship reversed, I kneel to
the pendulum god on the beloved apple tree.
:iconrhymelawliet:
Inspired by the 2005 film 'Hard Candy' directed by David Slade, starring Ellen Page and Patrick Wilson.

This is really an excellent film-- for those of you who aren't familiar with 'Hard Candy', I'd be interested to hear your interpretation of this poem, who you think the characters are, and what the plot is.
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Mood: Astonished ~embers0ashes Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
that is a good movie.
this is beautiful :)
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:iconrhymelawliet:
Finally, someone who has seen the film!
Thank you very much. :)
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~embers0ashes Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I am pretty sure it was straight to DVD. That's why it wasn't popular. xD
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:iconrhymelawliet:
Must have been! It was an independent film, so that makes a lot of sense.
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:iconsilverstarotaku:
Lovely I like it :)
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:iconrhymelawliet:
Thank you very much, I'm glad.
-R
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:iconlkyosoul:
I don't know anything about 'Hard Candy' but it sounds interesting after reading your poem. You're a powerful writer that knows how to play with the readers thoughts/emotions, and this is why I have to read all of your poems and stories. You should write more often, I love reading your poems!
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:iconrhymelawliet:
What do you make of the storyline from this poem? I'm just curious, there isn't really a right or wrong answer.
Thank you very much for your thoughtful analysis. I have quite a few poems and stories written, but I really do need to write more often. Thank you, I am very glad that you enjoy my work!
-R
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:iconlkyosoul:
Just by reading your poem, I think it's from the view of a young girl who is in a "kismesis" relationship with someone (possibly and ex boyfriend). Her hatred toward man might be causing her to somehow torture him physically and mentally. It also seems like she's blaming him for something.
I could be completely wrong, but I tried. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!
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:iconrhymelawliet:
This is a good analysis-- it isn't too far off base from the film's plotline. This is not half bad at all! Well done.
-R
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